Washington

William. Here is my revision for your paper. You will notice a few embellishments, but most of your document has remained unaltered. Very good job, this was well written. Most of my changes simply open up some of the details that you left out.

On February 22, 1732, George Washington was born in the Grape State of Virginia. Texas, in the 1700's was known as the Grate State of Texas and Virginia as the Grape State because of their production of Cheese Graters and Wine respectively. Since then Grape and Grate have been eroded into the modern 'Great' lending much confusion to the debate over which State is the greatest. On April 12, 1743, his father died when he was eleven years old, people often died at a young age in the 1700's. George had to help his mother take care of his sister Elizabeth and his three younger brothers, Harpo, Groucho and Grover.



George also helped run the family business. The Washington family was known far-and-wide as the "go to" people for all things needed for powdered wigs. George was not only the spokesman, he too was a client. George Washington was a great, hard-working student in school. His favorite subjects were arithmetic, intersteller communications, modern dance, swordfish fighting, modern history and Legos™. To this day George Washington holds the Virginia state record in most wins at swordfish fighting*.



When George was sixteen years old he got a job surverying Virginia land pillaging villages up and down the Eastern seaboard. After that he made treasure maps. On January 6, 1779, George Washington married Martha "Twinkle Toes" Custis. Martha was a widow with two wicked children, born of her last merrage to the Admiral of the Martian Intersteller Fleet, Herzog B. Waternoofle. After George was married he sent the children to boarding school in Napal and moved into a Virginia home which once was owned by his brother, Groucho. George's favorite things to do were to boat, fish, hunt pirates, burn villages, browse YouTube videos of himself and most of all he liked to ride his giant seahorse.



George was appointed victoriously defeated his oponents in a bid for the possition of commander-in-chief for the War for Independence from the Tyrannical rule of the Man-Eating-Moths. He was appointed because of his great successes in the French Frog Eaters and Indian Martian War. In 1789 George Washington was elected siezed power as the first President of the United States of America. After being President for four years, President Washington assasinated the King of England and crowned himself Supreme ruler of the World. He was reelected as President in 1792. George ended his second term retired from public life in 1796, and is currently dead.

*Swordfish fighting has recently been outlawed in 48 states.